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On saint Patrick day I felt like I won’t be lonely and i felt happy.I felt happy because I like staying around people because they always smile at me.
I felt comfortable sitting next to my soul friend because she always plays with me and smiles at me.
I felt happy and excited sharing lunch because I like sharing with others.
The food we had was chips,drinks and biscuits.My favourite was the biscuits,It tastes cheesy.The drink I got had a lot of chocolate in it.
The chips taste like chicken.I really enjoyed it because I like spending time with my soul friend.
I like spending time with my soul friend because she always talks and smiles at me.
We are learning to write a recount using our personal voice.I used my personal voice in my writing when I describe?
Hi Fiapo,
ReplyDeleteI like how you described what the food tasted like and I like how you told us what you had for shared lunch.
Your writing reminds me of my shared lunch.
I think it is helpful to put punctuation and make sure you using capital letters
Well done Fiapo.
done Fiapo
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